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Band 3.5

Many people find it difficult to speak in front of and to present to anaudience. It is believed that this skill should be taught in school. Why is this important? To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

Nowadays,
speak
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speaking
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 in
a
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apply
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public and
be
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being
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 presentable to an audience is
very
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 important task.
while
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 many people find it difficult to speak in
front
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 of and to present themselves
in
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an
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 audience.
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,
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this
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these
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 skills should be taught in school. I
am totally agree
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 with the statement
which
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and
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 I can define my point very clearly in upcoming paragraphs.
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 , I personally
believes
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 that every human being should learn how to speak in
front
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 of anybody.
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 as, Kids have to learn How to speak with elders and How to be respectful
with
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 each and every person .
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 that older people should know how to speak in
front
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 of kids with all good words and behaviour towards children there is one say " once a man is always a man" Generally, In
the
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apply
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metro-politian
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metro-politician
metro-political
cities
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cities,
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 the schools
conducts
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conduct
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 Three to Four periods in a week for public speaking skills till standard Ninth.
Where as
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,
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apply
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the teachers
conducts
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conduct
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 debate competitions
in
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at
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 the end of every month which is compulsory for the
students
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 .
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, the
students
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 who
is
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are
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 in Higher Secondary School
they
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apply
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have a subject of project presentation , In
this
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 class faculties give topics and
deadline
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deadlines
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 for assignments to the children . Though ,the
students
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 have to perform their presentation in
the
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a
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 group of four
students
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 in the auditorium of the school premises.
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, In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 all the schools have to start giving education on public speaking skills and how to
presentable
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be presentable
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 in
front
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 of
audience
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an audience
the audience
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, but the development of your ideas could be further improved for clarity and coherence. Make sure each point flows logically to the next.
task achievement
Ensure that your statements are supported with clear and relevant examples. This will help strengthen your arguments and give depth to your points.
language use
Work on your grammar and punctuation. This will enhance the readability of your essay and ensure your ideas are conveyed more clearly.
task achievement
You clearly express your opinion on the importance of public speaking in schools, and your commitment to the topic is evident throughout the essay.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Articulate
  • Oratory
  • Elocution
  • Persuasive communication
  • Rhetorical skills
  • Eloquence
  • Confidence
  • Stage presence
  • Audience engagement
  • Non-verbal communication
  • Public discourse
  • Persuasion techniques
  • Presentation skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Diction
  • Anxiousness
  • Introversion
  • Curriculum integration
  • Subject mastery
  • Communication aptitude
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