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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart provides key information about various countries's
spendings
Fix the agreement mistake
spending
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 on renewables
through
Change preposition
over
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 a
period
Use synonyms
 of 25 years. The unit is measured in dollars.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Switzerland dominated for the whole
period
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.
In addition
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, Denmark oscillated at the beginning until 1990, when it started its significant rise,
whereas
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 Spain and the UK fluctuated almost the whole
period
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 below the 1 dollar line.
According to
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 what is shown, Switzerland and Denmark contributed the most to the research
overall
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. Where we can see the Switzerland line from 1975 until 1980 was near the other lines, with almost a one-dollar difference.
Then
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 it separated from the cast with a dramatic increase until it reached 5 dollars in 1999. In terms of Spain and the UK, their statistics show a stable-low contribution with spending below one dollar the whole
period
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, except in 1980,
where
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when
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 they went slightly above 1 dollar.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending
  • expenditure
  • investments
  • renewable energy
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • growth rates
  • comparative analysis
  • data representation
  • research funding
  • energy sources
  • historical trends
  • country comparison
  • significant changes
  • period under review
  • increase/decrease
  • economic implications
  • environmental impact
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