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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
The map illustrates the possible locations for a restaurant in the centre of Paris.
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, there are two options for the location, the first one is on the
north west
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northwest
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 side of the map,
while
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 the other one is on the
south east
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southeast
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 of the map. The two locations are positioned next to a park. The first location lies
in
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on
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 the right bank. There is a park
in
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on
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 the east side of the place,
in addition
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 to The Maritime Museum, which
placed
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infront
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in front
 of the park and has about 8000 visitors per day. There is
also
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 the Aquarium which has 6000 visitors each day.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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