You are a librarian, and a local resident wrote to you asking to hist a community event in the library. Write a letter to him.

Dear Mr.Kruz I hope
this
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letter will find you well and in good spirit. I am a local librarian. In your
last
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letter
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letter,
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you wrote about your willingness
about organizing
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to organize
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a community event in the library. So, I am writing
this
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message in order to inform you what kinds of events can take place. To tell the truth, you can plan competitions among the students who joined the group.
Moreover
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, you may hold many literacy nights with poets. Added to
this
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, lots of debates about novels take place every
weekends
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in our library I would like to tell you about the procedures for organizing an occasion. One of the main procedures is that you have to have an authorization. In fact, you can accept it from our local council.
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, you must present
us
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to us
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the main aim of the affair and
benefits
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its benefits
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of
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apply
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it
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apply
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. If I inform you more, there are
also
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available many rules that I require. First and foremost, you have to be a member of our group. Added to
this
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, only sophisticated and polite people can visit there.
Moreover
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, during the
occasion
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occasion,
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you must keep the rooms and furniture clean. I hope you will take my message into consideration and accept it as if it is highly necessary for you. I look forward to hearing from you soon Yours sincerely, Umurzoqova Z

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task achievement
Consider using a more formal and concise introduction to set a professional tone.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on a single idea and maintains a smooth flow.
task achievement
You effectively communicated the purpose of the letter and provided relevant information about organizing events.
coherence cohesion
Your closing statement was polite and inviting, which adds a nice touch to your writing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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