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Experts believe that, over the next decade, robots will be doing many of the jobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

The
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 of artificial intelligence is currently being discussed by many experts. Some believe that in the
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 many
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 done by humans are to be taken over by
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 machines. Some have a positive outlook on
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, others express some concerns.
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, the
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 where the hardest tasks are performed by robots evokes optimism. In a perfect world cleaning, operating dangerous equipment, repetitive labour and customer service would all be taken care of by AI
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 humans could partake in activities that bring them joy.
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 is comforting albeit hard to accomplish.
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 why a lot of people form a different, more sinister view
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 of artificial intelligence. It is thought that in a situation where a lot of
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 can be done by robots most
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 workers would inevitably lose their income and have to look for another position.
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 might not be possible in certain cases, leading to a soaring unemployment rate and even an increase in homelessness. Another concern that some individuals raise is the trajectory of the use of AI as it seems to replace the
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 most strive to protect,
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 as artistic professions. In conclusion, the
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 of robots taking over people's
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 is quite polarising.
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 in my opinion the disadvantages largely outweigh the fantasy.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples to illustrate your points about how AI will affect jobs, both positively and negatively. This can strengthen your argument and make it more compelling.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly link your ideas between sentences and paragraphs, ensuring that each one follows logically from the previous one. Transitional phrases can help improve the flow.
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While your essay presents both sides, it could benefit from a clearer articulation of your personal stance in the introduction to frame the discussion.
content
The essay addresses both advantages and disadvantages of robots taking over jobs, providing a balanced view.
style
Your writing style is engaging and maintains a tone that is suitable for an academic discussion, which is commendable.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • cost-effective
  • job displacement
  • economic impact
  • skill gap
  • high-skilled labor
  • workplace safety
  • ethical concerns
  • technological advancement
  • human resources
  • retraining programs
  • hazardous environments
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