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The chart below shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006.

The aim of
this
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 report is to compare and contrast the
price
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 fluctuation of four types of
bread
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 in one European country during the
years
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 2001 to 2005. The
X axis
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 showcases the timeframe in
years
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,
while
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 the Y axis represents the
price
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 in euros.
Overall
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 we can immediately notice that the
price
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 of
bread
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was
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has
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 steadily
increasing
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increased
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 throughout the
years
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.
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,
wholegrain
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bread
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 experienced the most significant jump by a whole
euro
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 going from two thousand and one to two thousand and two. It
then
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 corrected itself and went down to one
euro
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 the following year, nearly matching the
price
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for
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of
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 white
bread
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.
Furthermore
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, it was brown
bread
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 that
also
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 underwent the biggest surge in
price
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 during the same
years
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 as
wholegrain
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. It escalated in cost by nearly a
euro
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 as well,
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however
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 it didn't correct itself and stayed at about 1,5
euro
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 for the next four
years
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. What's more, unlike
wholegrain
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bread
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 with high volatility, white
bread
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 continued to grow steadily after a jump in 2002 by 40 cents. It improved by ten cents each year until 2005. Generally, the
price
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 of
bread
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 throughout the given
years
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 was increasing, some more dramatically than others, with the exception of
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wholegrain
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whole grain
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bread
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, which returned to its former
price
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 four
years
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 ago.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, bread, years, wholegrain, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "jump" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Analyze
  • Price trend
  • Period
  • Increase / Decrease in price
  • Compare
  • Starting prices
  • Shift over time
  • Causes
  • Inflation
  • Cost of wheat
  • Consumer demand
  • Price volatility
  • Types of bread
  • Market trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Euros
  • 800 grams
  • European country
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