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The chart below shows the price in Euros of 800 grams of four types of bread in one European country from 2001 to 2006.

The aim of
this
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 report is to analyse the presented chart that presents the
price
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 in
Euros
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 of 800 grams of four types of
bread
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 in
one
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 European country from 2001 to 2006.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in 2001 wholegrain
bread
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 was the most expensive
one
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 and in 2002 the
price
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 even reached its peak at 1.8
Euros
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. In the following
years
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 the
price
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 rapidly dropped and in 2005 it cost 0,8
Euros
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. The graph
also
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 illustrates that during these years the cost of white and
rye
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 types of
bread
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were
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 pretty much stable - in 2001 white
bread
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 was 0,6
Euros
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 and in 2005 it grew to 1.1
Euros
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. The
price
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 of
rye
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bread
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 in 2001 was
also
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 0,6 Euro and over the years in 2005 it was 0,7 Euro. The graph
also
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 indicates that the brown type of
bread
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 was
one
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 of the cheapest in 2001 costing 0,6 Euro but its
price
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 started rapidly growing and in 2005 it was 1.6 making it the most expensive type of
bread
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. Generally,
according to
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 the graph in
2001
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2001,
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 the most expensive type of
bread
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 was wholegrain, the cheapest - brown, white and
rye
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 and in 2005 the priciest
one
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 was brown and the cheapest -
rye
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, euros, bread, one, rye with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Analyze
  • Price trend
  • Period
  • Increase / Decrease in price
  • Compare
  • Starting prices
  • Shift over time
  • Causes
  • Inflation
  • Cost of wheat
  • Consumer demand
  • Price volatility
  • Types of bread
  • Market trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Euros
  • 800 grams
  • European country
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