Experts believe that, over the next decade,robots will be doing many of the jobs currently done by humans. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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believed that in the
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be able to walk on water.
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speculation turned out quite different -
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may not be able to walk on water yet, but
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has developed to the point where it can do their
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for them.
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' place in the
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area has increased its number over the past decade and it had some positive
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, safety concerns -
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in factories, construction sites, offshore oil rings etc. causes serious health
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for
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and
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integration has created safer
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space.
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, in some
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machines can get the job done better, especially where it requires accuracy and extreme
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skills
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as cutting big pieces of something or working with
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. All in all,
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doing the job done by
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has a positive effect when it comes to improving
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work space
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and working with things, where
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have limited possibilities.
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technology
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in the human
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industry has its advantages it
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has a downside. When it comes to a job that requires education or a degree and
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overtake it, not only is it a waste of time for
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a waste of resources - knowledge. Machines taking human jobs creates unemployment
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, where it comes to
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losing their homes simply because they can’t afford it
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work
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issues
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. In conclusion,
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doing jobs done by
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have
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advantages and disadvantages. When it comes to helping with
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health
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and limited capability -
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in their
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has a positive effect, but when it comes to
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losing jobs and increased unemployment, machines create obstacles for the
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economy.

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Good introduction that sets the context for the discussion.
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You raised relevant points regarding both advantages and disadvantages of robots in the workforce.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • cost-effective
  • job displacement
  • economic impact
  • skill gap
  • high-skilled labor
  • workplace safety
  • ethical concerns
  • technological advancement
  • human resources
  • retraining programs
  • hazardous environments
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