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The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010.

The chart below shows the gross domestic product of four different countries in 2005 and 2010.
The Line chart below demonstrates the use of power from (the) sun in the USA, Germany, Japan and China.
Overall
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USA
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the USA
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 and China’s use of solar power experienced a significant increase
all
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over the time period. Japan’s use decreased gradually and Germany’s remained relatively stable The United States
is
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was
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 the most country
who
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that
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 consumed solar energy in 1995 approximately below 8,000 ,
then
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 it showed a
consistently
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 increase every year to reach its peak at around 18,000 in 2015.
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, China was the lowest nation in solar energy usage at the start of
time
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the
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 period. It had a gradual increase between 1995 and 2005 just slightly above 2000,
then
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 It significantly climbed from 2005 to 2015 to reach below 12,000. Japan’s consumption of solar power
starts
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started
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 at 6,000 in 1995,
then
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 decreased gradually throughout the time period to reach
at
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below 4,000 in 2015. For Germany, it relatively remained stable
which
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its consumption in 2015 was as same amount as in 1995, slightly above 2,000.

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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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