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The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.

The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
The line graph illustrates the fluctuating rates of three types of crimes:
burglary
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,
car
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 theft and robbery in Newport city centre over the decade spanning from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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,
burglary
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 started at the highest point among
three
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the three
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 lines and
then
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 decreased
at the end
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 of the period.
While
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 robbery was the least common type of crime and showed minimal variation,
car
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 theft remained relatively stable with minor fluctuations. Looking at
burglary
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, the number of
incidents
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 started at approximately 3500 in 2003,
peaked
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and peaked
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 at nearly 3700 in 2004. The following 4 years followed by
the
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 sharp decline before hitting its bottom of around 1200
incidents
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. The rates of
burglary
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 in the remaining period increased a little bit and remained nearly unchanged around the point of 1400
incidents
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.
Car
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 theft began at nearly 2800
incidents
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 in 2003, rose slightly in 2004,
then
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 dropped to about 2000 in 2006.
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, unlike
burglary
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, the number of
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 thefts remained relatively stable from 2006 onwards, ending at approximately 2700 in 2012. Robbery was the least frequent crime throughout the period. Starting at around 500
incidents
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 in 2003, it peaked at nearly 900 in 2005 and
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 declined gradually to just over 500 in 2011 before finishing slightly higher in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, car, incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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