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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka 1

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Beka 1
The bar chart below illustrates the number of people of different ages at different
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 in Iceland between 1990 and 2020.
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, the number of people in the
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 category 25-54 increased and became the most numerous.
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 the two younger
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 decreased
little
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 bit. The population of
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 elder
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 groups changed
least
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,
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 and stayed about the same. The 25-54
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 category grew from
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about 30
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 in 1990 to nearly half of the population in 2020. The two older groups have insignificant
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. The population of
65
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age
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group
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 remained at about 15
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. The 55-64
age
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group
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 decreased from nearly 15
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percent
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 in 1990 to 10
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 in 2020.
By contrast
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, the 0-14
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group
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 decreased gradually from just over 25
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 in 1990 to just under 20
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percent
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 in 2020. The percentage of
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group
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groups
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 15-24 declined from over 20
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1990 to under 10
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percent
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 in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, percent, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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