You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir/Madam, My name is
Jessilia
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Jessica
, I am a medical student in the
last
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semester. I am writing to you
in
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regarding some problems I
am
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facing in my accommodation for the past few weeks. As you must be aware final exam is coming in the next couple
weeks
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. I have to focus on my
study
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however
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however,
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my roommate makes me unable to study. She regularly
bring
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her friends to stay in our room and they keep chatting until
mid night
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midnight
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. I have told her to find some other places to hang out with her friend. Eventually, she
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not care about what
said
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. I will be happy if you can move me to
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room. I would
be
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prefer
if
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you could move me to a
single-room
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single room
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, so I could have my own room and I can
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on my study. Thank you for your attention in
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case, I eagerly wait for your response.
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sincerely,
Jessilia
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Jessica

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task achievement
Consider using more formal language and structure to enhance the professionalism of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas clearly in each paragraph to improve readability. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea related to your situation and request.
task achievement
You have clearly stated the issues you are facing with your current accommodation and your request for a single room.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your message well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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