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Writing Samples
Band 3

many people have to work longer time , and they feel more stressful than before what are reason and but soultion are of this problem

it is argued that
emplyess
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employees
employers
 are working for longer hours at
office
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 which
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create
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the
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mind set
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mindset
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problem
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problems
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 among the
people
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 . there are some reasons behind
this
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trend
teend
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trend
 and some measures can be taken to make the balance in working life the
significanct
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significant
significance
 reason is
that
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inflation . the
price
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prices
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 of houses and food
are
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touching
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increasing
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 at
peak
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their peak
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 which
is
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makes it
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 very
diifecult
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difficult
 for
people
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 to handle all the expenses.
therefore
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, worker
are
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is
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 trying to spend some
over time
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overtime
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beacuse
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because
 they can get overtime money with the help of it and they can
mange
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manage
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 their all house expense .
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cbce
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cable
new
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 declared a report, where it is showed that
8out
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8 out
10
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of 10
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emplyess
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employees
employers
 are willing to spend more hours as they want to earn more .
Alothoug
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Although
 there are some
myrid
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myriad
reason
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reasons
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 behind it , some vital
step
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steps
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 should be taken to mitigate
this
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 problem .
firstly
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government
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the government
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 should take some steps which can reduce the grocery
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 housing prices .
thry
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They
 can decrease the interest prices of
house
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houses
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 and can
reduced
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tax
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taxes
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 on
kids
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kids'
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 things and
grocery
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groceries
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.
Fir
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exmple
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example
 in 2024 ,
canada
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the Canadian
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 government stop to take tax on
grocery
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groceries
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 and kids all materialistic things from
december
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 to
february
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February
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. with the help of
this
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, many
people
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 get
a
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relief from
expensive
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 burden
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 ,some
seps
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steps
 can be useful to reduce
the
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stress inflation , which can help
people
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 to
mange
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manage
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 their work
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 professional life .

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You included some relevant examples, such as the report about employee overtime, showing critical thinking.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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