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The bar graphs provide a breakdown of the typical weekdays and weekends with hours and ages about family members

The bar graphs provide a breakdown of the typical weekdays and weekends with hours and ages about family members
The Double Bar catalogue compares the layout of a family member's maturity and freedom on weekdays and weekends .
At the first stage
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 the main change on the weekday's Papa choice is equal to the 2 hours to the coming maturity is 0-1,
in contrast
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 , at the double box of the excursion, there are fathers aged 0-1 and with 0 chance. After that, there are a couple of charts on the weekdays that show Dad dibs compared with the old age of 2-3 equal to 0 occasions and dotage of double is 4-5 with 2 spare moments,
furthermore
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 at the exponent opportunity double catalogue is in 0 freedom with era 2-3 and 4-5, next coming to the first weekdays the
At the end
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 daddy's recourses is equal to 0 leisure with 6-7 old age and beginning of the period chart the occasion is approximately equal to 2 terms with a number of years 8-9.
To conclude
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 , in the second box, there are a couple of charts with no changes. Coming to the Mother's privilege it is clearly shown on the weekday Mom's recourse is approximately equal to the 6 times with generation and at the exponent bod of expeditions , there are declines to the 4 quarter with no changes of years.
To sum up
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, there are Both genders are equal to 8 times with years and
in addition
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 at the excursion both husband and wife’s occasions are equal to the highest number of 10 terms with invariable ages.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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