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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line charts illustrate the amount of
petrol
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spend
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spent
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 by the United States and the United Kingdom
people
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, broken by
group
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a group
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 of income.
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, the use of fuel for the poor is the lowest compared to the other groups, and the richest spend the most
of
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on
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 fuel in the United Kingdom,
whereas
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 the data in the United States presents the opposite. In the
Unied
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United
 States, the poorest spend the highest percentage,
stood
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 at 4% to 5%
of
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on
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petrol
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, and the trend
keep
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 declining over the other groups of income.
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, the group of poor income in the
UK
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 only consume around 0.2% to 2.5% of
petrol
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.
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, a similar trend can be seen for the
middle-class
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middle class
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, where the US spend more
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petrol
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on petrol
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 compared to the
UK
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.
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, regardless of the fact that some
of
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rich Americans spend more
petrol
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 than the
UK
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people
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, the majority of the wealthy group in the
UK
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 is spending a bit more
petroleum
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 compared to the US, rich British
people
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 spend 3.2% to 3.8% of oil and the American
people
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 spend approximately 2.7% to 3.9% of
petrol
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Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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