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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.
The maps illustrate the various changes
of
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 the village of Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
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, the village mainly has transformed into a residential area with the addition of roads and
houses
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. Meanwhile, only the post office remained unchanged. To start with, the original farmland along
southwest
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the southwest
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 and northeast sides of the main
road
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 was removed. Numerous roads were extended along the main
road
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 to allow more
houses
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 built along both sides of it.
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, the two shops on
west
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the west
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 side of
main
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the main
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road
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was
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also
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rebult
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rebuilt
built
 into a brand new
road
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.
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, the huge garden was minimalized into a retirement area with a path leading to the main
road
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. Additional buildings were
contructed
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constructed
 around the old large
houses
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, creating more living space.
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,
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 two
houses
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 were built around the primary school, it
remaind
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remained
remains
 in the same location as 80 years before, and so did the post office.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words houses, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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