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In many countries, fast food is becoming more popular than traditional meals. Why is this happening? Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?

In today’s world, fast
food
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 is becoming more common in many countries. Many
people
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 are eating fast
food
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instead
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 of cooking traditional meals. There are many reasons why
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 is happening. In my opinion,
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 trend has more disadvantages than advantages. One reason fast
food
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 is more popular is because it is quick and easy.
People
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 are busy with work, school, and other activities, so they don’t have time to cook. Fast
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 restaurants are everywhere, and they offer
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 very fast.
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, fast
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 is usually cheap, so
people
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 who don’t have much money prefer it. Another reason is that fast
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 is advertised a lot. On TV and social media, we see many ads that make fast
food
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 look tasty and fun.
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 makes
people
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 want to try it, especially young
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 and children.
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, eating too much fast
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 is bad for health. It has too much oil, sugar, and salt.
People
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 who eat fast
food
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 all the time can become overweight or have heart problems.
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, eating fast
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 means
people
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 stop eating traditional meals, which are often healthier and more balanced. In conclusion, fast
food
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 is popular because it is fast, cheap, and
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. But I believe it has more disadvantages because it is not healthy and makes
people
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 forget their traditional
food
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 habits.

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Task Achievement
Consider expanding on your main points with more detail or examples. For instance, provide specific statistics or studies to support your claims about health issues related to fast food.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly connect your ideas with more cohesive devices to enhance flow. For example, using transitions like 'Moreover' or 'Furthermore' can help link your reasons together more effectively.
Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly states the topic and your opinion on the trend between fast food and traditional meals, which sets a good foundation for your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and restates your opinion, providing closure to your argument.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • globalization
  • nourishment
  • culinary traditions
  • affordability
  • appetite
  • fast-paced lifestyles
  • social gatherings
  • advertising campaigns
  • culinary diversity
  • processed foods
  • health implications
  • cultural significance
  • socioeconomic factors
  • habits
  • sustainability
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