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Band 3.5

Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained in popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be taken as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days many people show their interest in learning education
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online rather than traditional ones. Other people claim that
e- learning
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 become more popular as
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 to the courses taken
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 university or college. I agree with both views so in
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i
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 would like to describe
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balance
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 view from my side which
are
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 worth considering.
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, many students can learn anything from anywhere. There is no necessary to
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 in
classroom
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.
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, they can gain knowledge anytime.
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, they do not have to face hustle
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 traffic. They can easily save their precious time and can do
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 work
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 that particular time.
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,
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 think online courses are far better than the studies held in college or university.
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, many new generations show their interest in online learning programs . On the
another
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 hand, people may face issues
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 internet connection , power supply and many other
insfrastructure
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infrastructure
. Some students are not able to understand
the
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certain topics and they may feel bored because they cannot interact and enjoy talking with their peers. In
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 competitive
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 they are unable to know the place where their universities
lies
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or
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even they
donot
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do not
 know the value of time. In conclusion , some students show much more interest in
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 learning as compared
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go
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 the past
however
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, many young
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children
children's
choldrens
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children
 who want to know the outside
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area
arera
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area
 of
world
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they
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can choose the traditional way of learning

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task achievement
The introduction could more clearly outline the scope of your argument. Consider explicitly stating your position on the topic instead of introducing both sides equally at the beginning.
coherence
Make sure to use linking words or phrases to enhance the flow of your ideas between sentences and paragraphs. This helps improve coherence. For example, using 'However' at the beginning of paragraphs could enhance the transition between points.
coherence
There are some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing that could be improved. Proofreading your essay for errors will make your writing clearer. For example, instead of 'as compare to', it should be 'as compared to'.
task achievement
You effectively provide arguments for both sides of the discussion, which shows consideration of different perspectives.
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You've included relevant examples to illustrate your points, such as the benefits of online learning in terms of flexibility and time-saving.
coherence
Your conclusion summarizes the main idea of your essay, which is important to leave a strong impression on the reader.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distance learning
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • innovative technologies
  • digital tools
  • self-paced learning
  • structured environment
  • discipline
  • motivation
  • direct engagement
  • soft skills
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • networking
  • direct support
  • feedback
  • understanding
  • retention
  • traditional classroom
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