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The given maps demonstrate the changes in Frenton from 1990 to 2012.

The given maps demonstrate the changes in Frenton from 1990 to 2012. In 1990, Frenton had a more natural and traditional layout. There were playing fields with trees in the northeast and a large
area
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 occupied by
greenary
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 in the southwest. A park and café were located in the
center
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, near a theatre and houses occupying the large
area
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 at the extreme right side of the layout. The town
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 had a school, hospital, library, bank, and shops.
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, by 2012, many changes had occurred. The playing fields and houses in the northeast were replaced by blocks of flats. The trees in the southwest were removed and replaced by a technopark. The café and park were turned into a hotel and golf course
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 the theatre was replaced by a cinema, and a supermarket was built by removing shops. The bank was demolished to make the
area
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 clear for a restaurant near the school. Despite the changes, some structures remained the same,
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 as the school, library and hospital
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the same place but occupying more
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 than previously.
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, Frenton experienced significant urban development, by demolishing many natural spaces like playing fields,
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and park
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park
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parks
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 for building modern
residence
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residences
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.

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Expand the introduction to include a brief overview of the main changes in Frenton between the two years.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to use more linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your ideas smoothly.
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Include more specific examples or data from the maps to enhance the clarity and relevance of your points.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear overview of the main changes in Frenton, addressing the task well.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence is generally good; most ideas flow logically from one to the next.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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