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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at the social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020 Image for topic: The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at the social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at the social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020 Image for topic: The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at the social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The graph illustrates the number of
participants
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 in various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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, the number of
participants
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 increased over
this
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 period,
although
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 some activities experienced a decrease. A few activities saw a rise,
such
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 as table tennis and musical performances,
while
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 some remained fairly similar,
such
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 as film club and martial arts;
however
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, a decline in amateur dramatics was identified. The film club was the most popular, with 65
participants
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 in 2000.
This
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 number steadily decreased to 60 in 2010 and
then
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 steadily increased to 70 in 2020.
This
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 was followed by martial arts, with 37 people in 2000, which fluctuated by five every five years, resulting in similar numbers in 2020.
Thirdly
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, amateur dramatics had around 25–30
participants
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 from 2000 to 2005, but there was a steady decline every five years: to 20 in 2010,
then
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 13, and
finally
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 5 people in 2020. In the case of table tennis, which had 15 to 20
participants
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 from 2000 to 2010, a steady rise was observed to 55 in 2020.
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, musical performances, which started in 2005, have risen steadily to 20 people in 2020.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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