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University and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?Find essays with the same topic

It is argued that
educating
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 at university become available
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digital
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the digital
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classroom
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that
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become
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 more easier than physical
classroom
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while
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people
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 are used to the physical
classroom
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 which leads to several challenges to determine hard if the advantages over the
disadvantages
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 or the opposite side.
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, I agree that the advantages over
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. I will discuss both views in
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that
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educating on digital
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classroom
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classrooms
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impact
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about
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plenty of things
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 as saving our time and money that
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allowing
people
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 to learn
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 in their own
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instead
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 of going
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somewhere and
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 the
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then
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return your
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 home.
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, I
remmber
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remember
 when I was studying at university during covid 19
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 could
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focus
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lecture
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 and I have ever gotten the highest grade at university except
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tearm
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time
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due to
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because
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was
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 a greet mental healthe and mind.
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, The best advantage is you can record the
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 or if you missed the
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 and you did not understand
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piont
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point
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 you can simply
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watch
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 as much as you want.
on the other hand
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,
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learning
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digital
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a digital
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classroom
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convenient
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some
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for some
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people
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 because
learn
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physical
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a physical
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classroom
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 has especially atmosphere
that
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where
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people
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 can build relationships with each other,
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and learning
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learning
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learn
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 many things in
the
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life
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 you cannot learn
on
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digital
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a digital
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class room
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classroom
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. In conclusion, I agree that educating
on
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digital
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a digital
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classroom
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is
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 more advantages than
the
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apply
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disadvantages
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due to
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people
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while
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disadvantages
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on
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of
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classroom
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classrooms
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 that
lost
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lose
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encourage
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an encourge
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 environment and
build
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building
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 relationships with other students

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task response
Work on your thesis statement to make it clearer and more precise. Ensure your introduction clearly states your opinion, so readers know what to expect.
coherence and cohesion
Try to better organize your ideas in paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea, introduced clearly, with supporting sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Improve your use of linking words to enhance the connection between ideas and paragraphs, making your essay easier to follow.
task response
Ensure that your vocabulary is accurate. For example, instead of 'became available,' you could use 'has become available.'
task achievement
You provide relevant examples from your personal experience, which strengthens your argument about the advantages of distance learning.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion summarizes your main points effectively, reiterating your position clearly.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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