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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in2010
The bar chart compares the amount of money spent on five different products in
France
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 and The United Kingdom in 2010. The figures are given in
pounds
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 sterling.
Overall
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, cars were the most common goods to buy in both countries,
while
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 the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the
UK
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 compared to cameras in
France
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.
Furthermore
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, the most significant difference in
expenditure
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 between the two countries was on cameras. In terms of cars, people in the
UK
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 spent about 450,000
pounds
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 on
this
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 as opposed to the French at 400,000
pounds
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.
Similarly
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, the British
expenditure
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 on books was higher than the French (around 400,000
pounds
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 and 300,000
pounds
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 respectively). In the
UK
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,
expenditure
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 on cameras (just over 350,000
pounds
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) was over double that of
France
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, which was only 150,000
pounds
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.
On the other hand
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, the amount of money paid out on the remaining goods was higher in
France
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. Above 350,000
pounds
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 was spent by the French on computers which was slightly more than the British who spent exactly 350,000
pounds
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. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for 200,000 of
expenditure
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 in
France
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 but under 150,000 in the
UK
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, pounds, uk, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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