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Band 5

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Living in a country in which
people
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 do not speak your mother tongue can have both some critical social and practical obstacles. I completely agree with
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 statement based on several reasons. The most crucial practical issue you may come across when living in a foreign country with a foreign
language
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 is inevitably impaired communication with
others
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.
That is
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, you can not establish a good rapport with your
neighbors
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 and colleagues if you can not precisely make them comprehend what you are trying to say. Every
language
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 has its intricate rules
in
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for
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 using the correct word or phrase in a convenient situation to convey your intention and thoughts perfectly and concisely.
However
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, a non-native speaker may not have the chance to be well-informed of all of them. Take the phrase take off as an example; imagine what an offence would it be to directly
say
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tell
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 someone
that
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apply
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when they are going to take off
to
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ask about the time of their flight as it is an impolite way of asking the
others
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 to leave in the native-speaking
language
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. What is more,
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language
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 barrier not only prevents foreigners
to have
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from having
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 good practical communication
whit
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with
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others
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 but can gradually launch them on the path of feeling unassertive and depressed.
People
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 unconsciously pay less attention to someone who is struggling with finding suitable words and stuttering which makes that non-native person feel embarrassed and even more self-conscious constantly.
Although
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 they might even be some talented and intelligent
people
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 who can play a substantial role in different professional occasions,
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language
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 barrier may never let them
to
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be seen and appreciated.
Consequently
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, they prefer not to talk and even break the ice unless it is so necessary and it definitely leads to loss of self-confidence and
feeling
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feelings
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 of loneliness which make non-natives face destructive mood disorders
such
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 as depression. In conclusion, immigrating to another foreign country
whit
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with
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 can have some disastrous impacts on
people
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 psychologically and make them face with social problems as they may find it
so struggling
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difficult
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 to communicate
others
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.

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task achievement
Consider refining your introduction to clearly outline the points you will discuss in the essay. A stronger thesis statement can better communicate your stance.
coherence and cohesion
While your ideas are generally clear, strive for more precise language to express intricate ideas. For instance, refine sentences for clarity and conciseness.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure correct spelling and grammar throughout the essay. For example, the phrase 'whit' should be 'with'. Small mistakes can detract from the overall readability of your writing.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear argument that supports the thesis, with relevant reasons outlining the social and practical issues caused by language barriers.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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