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In many countries, the number of people choosing to live alone is increasing rapidly. What are the causes of this trend? Is it a positive or negative development?

In recent years, more
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 have chosen to live alone, especially in big cities.
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 is happening for many reasons, and in my opinion, it is a mostly positive trend.
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 essay will explain the causes and discuss why I believe
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 is a good development. One main reason is that living alone gives
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 more freedom to manage their daily lives.
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, teenagers who go to university in another city often rent a small apartment near campus.
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 helps them save time and focus on their studies without distractions.
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, living alone can build responsibility and independence, which are useful life skills.
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, there are some disadvantages. Some
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 may feel lonely or lose close contact with their family.
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, young adults who move away
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, living alone can be expensive, especially in big cities like Bangkok or Tokyo.
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 who have low
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 might face high rent and bills. In conclusion, even though there are some downsides, I believe that living alone offers more benefits, especially for young
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. It helps them grow, make decisions, and prepare for the future. With proper support,
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 trend can be very positive.

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Well-structured introduction and conclusion.
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Clear expression of personal opinion on the trend.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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