The Advantages and Disadvantages of Children Having a Large Number of Toys

In today's consumer-driven world, it is
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common
things
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for parents to purchase numerous amount of
toys
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for their
child
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children
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.
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it may
offers
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several benefits
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as improved creativity, It
also
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leads
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outcomes
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redusing focus and a strong
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sense
of avarice. In
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essay, I will provide both advantages and disadvantages
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before providing
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aproach
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approach
. First and foremost, one key
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is being access
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to
wide
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a wide
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range of
toys
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enhence
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enhance
creativity and cognitive level of
child
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the child
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.
while
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block games
stimulates
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imagination, Puzzles and simulation games
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encourages
encourage
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skill
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skills
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, in order to enjoy a
lego
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,
children
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have to create
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the illusion
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of a story in his or her
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.
however
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, it won't stop with
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building
a lego structures
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will teach basic engineering and planning
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concepts
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.
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, Sometimes a toy can be
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of self-comfort.
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their
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early age, a lot of
children
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will have a problem with social interaction. To solve
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this problems
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, most parents appeal to dolls or animal
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as teddy
bear
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. When
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youngest
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the youngestor
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began to attend to a
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kindergarten
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kindergarten
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, there
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a
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notable
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drawback to consider. Overplaying
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might
lead
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addiction to
toys
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.
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,
instead
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of focusing
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on other
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other task
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such
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as
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studying or spending more time with a family, they play much more than normal. And
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is bad
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especially
when you remember not all
kind
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of
toys
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bring benefits to
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children
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children
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, when
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children
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start
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elementry
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elementary
school, they will not keep up with their peers
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lack
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of
the
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discipline.
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,
abundance
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an abundance
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of
toy
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may reduce
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sence
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sense
of appreciation
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alongside
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with
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a
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satisfaction. Because of
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, they can get
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bored
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frequently
and request a new toy more
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than
usual. At
first,
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this
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could
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seem
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not a big deal but as they
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up,
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will lead to inevitable problems
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depression
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not able to get his or her wanted
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job or
dissaticfaction
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dissatisfaction
in his or her life. In
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conclusion
conclusions
,
although
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overplaying
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develops
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several bad habits, It has more than enough
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positive
effects on
children
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such
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as
enhensing
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enhancing
crutial
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crucial
critical
skills of them.
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,
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ballanced
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balanced
approach is key to
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matter. Playing
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toys
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with toys
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under
parents
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parents'
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control can solve
this
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problem.

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language accuracy
Try to maintain consistent subject-verb agreement in your sentences. For example, use 'a common thing' instead of 'an common things' and 'it offers' instead of 'it may offers.'
structure and organization
Ensure that your thesis statement clearly outlines the discussion points of your essay and use appropriate transitions between paragraphs to enhance flow.
idea development
Expand on your ideas with more specific examples and explanations to provide a fuller response to the question.
task achievement
You have identified important advantages and disadvantages of children having a large number of toys, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
relevant examples
Your use of examples, such as Lego and teddy bears, adds relatability and depth to your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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