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Many individuals say that spending on space exploration is a waste of money. This, instead, should be better used to solve current problems on Earth. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?

A school of
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 that spending on
space
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exploration
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 is a waste of money and
belevie
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believes
 that
this
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 investment should be better used to solve current
problems
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 on
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earth
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Earth
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.
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 I acknowledge that focusing on
solve
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 current
problems
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 is important , I firmly assert that spending on
space
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exploration
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 is equally important. On the one hand , it is understandable that spending money to solve current
problems
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 on
earth
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 is essential with several major
benefit
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.
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 , it is vital to understand that
solve
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solving
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problems
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 on
earth
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such
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 as
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
, climate change or
economic
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economics
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 help improve
humanity
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humanity's
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 life and prevent negative
impact
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impacts
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to
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on
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
such
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 as pollution
water
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of water
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 ,
air
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and air
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 , .. and
also
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 fight against
the
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apply
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climate change that threatens the
earth
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’s ecosystems.
Effort
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 in
develop
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developing
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the economic
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economic
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economy
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 it is a important
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 it
help
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 gain more profit to invest in solving
problems
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 and help enhance human
quallity
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quality
 of life.
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 , there are a host of compelling reasons as to why I am convinced that it is
also
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 crucial for spending on
space
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exploration
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 . First and fore more , those
activites
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activities
has
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have
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 a positive impact
to
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on
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 humanity , To be more specific
exploration
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of
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space
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 in the long term can help
human
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humans
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 find new
place
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places
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 to
life
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in
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on
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other planet
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another planet
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 in case
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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are
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is
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 destroyed
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also
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and also
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 help
human
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humans
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 find out different species that have intelligent and develop human knowledge . In conclusion ,
while
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 it is irrefutable that spending to solve current
problems
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 on
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earth
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Earth
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play
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plays
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 a pivotal role , I would contend that there are compelling
reason
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reasons
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 why it is
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also
aslo
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also necessary
nessessary
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necessary
for
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to
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 invest in
space
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exploration
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language accuracy
Ensure to proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'belevie', 'enviroment', 'quallity'.
coherence
Use more transitional phrases to improve the flow between your sentences and paragraphs. Phrases like 'however', 'moreover', or 'on the contrary' can help clarify your arguments.
task achievement
Expand on your points for more depth. For instance, while you mention climate change, providing specific statistics or examples can strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential for task achievement.
task achievement
Your essay contains relevant points regarding both sides of the argument, showing that you understand the complexities of the issue.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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