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Many individuals say that spending on space exploration is a waste of money. This, instead, should be better used to solve current problems on Earth. To what degree do you support or oppose this idea?

numoerus amount of
people
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 arguing about
space
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 exploration and the
people
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on
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chrage
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charge
 spending huge
amount
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 of
money
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 on something they consider
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unnecesserliy
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unnecessary
unnecessarily
 and, rather
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then
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 spending
this
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money
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one
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space
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 they must
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focus
 on the
environmental
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environment
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 and other problems on
earth
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.
From
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In
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 my opinion, I prefer
on focusing
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to focus
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 on our current issues on
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earth
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Earth
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. On
one
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the one
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 hand,
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 is
a
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an
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anormus
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enormous
 place
therfore
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therefore
it's
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need
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 a huge found to explore.
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, the
space
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 size is
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infinite
infant
 and it would
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 many years to explore it.
In addition
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,
bulding
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building
 a spacecraft could cost millions of
dollors
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dollars
while
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 fixing the roads may cost of of it.
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,
2007
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in 2007
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,
USA
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the USA
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 had an exploration trip
to
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 March.
this
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 trip cost
nealy
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nearly
 900 million
dollor
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dollar
dollars
.
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, by
exploreing
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exploring
the
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apply
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space
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 we could find
low volume
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low-volume
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 materials on
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earth
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Earth
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. many
of
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apply
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people
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 who
agreeing
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 with
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 idea ,
they
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believe that we could find
a
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row
materials
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of materials
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 and new
sabstuns
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sab stuns
 that could improve the
quility
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quality
on
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of
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 the
earth
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. Another point to consider, the changes on the
earth
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 and the
pullotion
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pollution
 that could destroy the
earth
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, we need to find a similar plant to the
earth
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 so if the
earth
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 got extremely
pllouted
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polluted
, we
colud
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could
 move there.
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 , NASA found water
on
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in
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 March which could be a good
indecator
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indicator
 to move there and have a regular life.  In conclusion,
dispite
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despite
 the valid reasons of the
people
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 who think that exploring
the
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apply
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space
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s
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is
 not
weast
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a waste
 of
money
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 , I believe that with
this
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money
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 we could fix plenty of problems
such
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 as
,
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 the hanger in Africa, and
working
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work
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 on
develop
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developing
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 new technology to reduce the Air
plloution
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pollution
,
also
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 green gases.

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task achievement
Expand and clarify your arguments more thoroughly. Provide clearer reasoning for each of your points about space exploration and its benefits vs. Earth’s issues.
coherence
Improve the organization of paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and develop it coherently.
coherence
Avoid spelling errors (e.g., 'numerous', 'unnecessarily', 'infinitely'). Use spell-check tools to improve accuracy.
coherence
Be mindful of grammatical errors and sentence structure to improve readability (e.g., 'this money could fix plenty of problems').
task achievement
You have provided examples to support your argument, which is a positive aspect of your writing.
task achievement
Your position on the topic is clear, indicating a strong personal opinion.
coherence
You introduced both sides of the argument, which shows consideration of different viewpoints.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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