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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show the main transformation that took place in Ryemouth between 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
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, the village changed considerably over the period. It appears that Ryemouth has become
a
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much more residential, with more housing and
sport ground
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sports grounds
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.
According to
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 the map, on
northeast
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the northeast
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 side, there
were
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was
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 a large farmland and
forest
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a forest
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 park. The hotel was located on the corner of the main
road
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, and a cafe was across from it. A fishing port
were
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was
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 on the south side of the map, and there
were
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was
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 a fish market and shop nearby
it
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apply
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. The northwest side
were
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was
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housing
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a housing
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 area with most of the
house
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houses
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was
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being
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 built along the
road
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, and four of them were surrounded by the
road
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. As for now, the farmland and forest park
were
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have been
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 replaced by
the
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golf and tennis
court
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courts
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.
Besides
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 the hotel, a car park
were
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was
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 added. The fishing port
were
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was
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 demolished, and the fish market and shops converted into
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and apartments, which means the fish industry
are
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apply
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no longer existed in
this
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 area. The
road
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 has been extended and the number of houses
are
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is
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also
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increase
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increased
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. The only building that remains unchanged is the cafe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • key features
  • contrasting
  • developments
  • alterations
  • enhancements
  • infrastructure
  • recreational facilities
  • emerging
  • adaptation
  • population growth
  • connectivity
  • accessibility
  • preserve
  • aesthetics
  • analytically
  • livability
  • notable facilities
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