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The graph below shows the consumption of three kinds of spreads between 1981 and 2007.

The graph below shows the consumption of three kinds of spreads between 1981 and 2007.
The supplied graph provides data on the consumption of three types of spreads from 1981 to 2007.
Overall
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, a glance at the table reveals that
while
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 butter was the most used type,
low fat
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 and reduced spreads became the most popular one. The number
for
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of
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 butter stood at 140
grams
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 in 1981 before reaching its peak
with
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of
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 160
grams
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 in 1986. Afterwards, it had a sharp decrease, finishing with 50
grams
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 in 2007. Margine was the second
popular
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 choice with 90
grams
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 until 1991, when the figure intercepted with that of butter. Margine continued to be the
first,
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but after a decade, it had the equal number of
grams
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 as low fat and reduced spreads, and ended with
low
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less
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 than 40
grams
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. In terms of low fat and reduced spreads, it started to be produced in 1996 with 10
grams
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.
Then
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, the figure skyrocketed and reached its maximum in 2001 with over
than
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80
grams
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 before having a slight decline in 2007 with 70
grams
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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