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The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.

The diagrams below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.
The diagrams show the principles of house design in different climates.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 houses in warm weather areas require more windows for ventilation,
whereas
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 in cool climate zones need more heat storage
facility
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. Buildings in cool weather areas have a higher angled but shorter roof for the sake of increasing sunlight into the house and preventing snow accumulation.
In contrast
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, the
roof
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 of
the
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houses in warm areas are flatter and longer,
as a result
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,
it
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 can provide
a
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shade to people and can
decline
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decrease
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 the temperature. Both of them have insulation
system
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 to decrease
the
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heat loss, but it seems it is more important in
cool
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a cool
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 climate. The
material
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materials
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 they use are different too. In freezing
area
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areas
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, they use
material
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materials
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 that can prevent heat loss,
however
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, reflective materials are
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used to build houses in warm
area
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