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Band 3.5

Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing?

People are often arguing
that
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whether
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 spending a lot of
money
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 on their weddings is beneficial or not. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss a disadvantage and advantages of spending a lot of
money
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. On the one hand, some people think spending
much
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a lot of
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money
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for
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on
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lenting
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a
 wedding holl, buying decorations, an expensive wedding dress, and
foods
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food
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 is stupid. They believe saving
money
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 on
wedding
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weddings
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 to invest resources in
house
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a house
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 or spend for their future is more
valueable
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valuable
.
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, I focus on the moment that the bride and groom
injoy
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enjoy
 a special party with their parents and friends who they really love. If husband and wife provide
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a high
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high quality
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high-quality
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of
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apply
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foods
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food
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 and comfortable
sits
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seats
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, it will be a more successful ceremony.
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, memorable memories and beautiful
picture
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pictures
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 offer man and woman.
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, I have
dream
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dreamt
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 of my wedding ceremony. I often imagine what it would feel
if
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like if
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 I
marry
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married
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 in
a
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an
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 outside place which
seem
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seems
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 like a forest path and is decorated with flowers. It would
like
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be like
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 a moment
of
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in
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 the movie and I can invest
my
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a
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 large part of the
money
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for
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in
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 my dream. In conclusion, investing
big
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a big
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 part of their budget
make
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makes
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bride
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the bride
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 and
groom
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groom's
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 dream come true and
help
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helps
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treat
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them treat
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 their guests well. Deciding where to spend the
money
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 is all on the man and the woman,
however
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, I want to say spending a lot of
money
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 on their wedding is not a problem which others can blame them.

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Check for grammatical errors and awkward phrasing as they can distract from your message. Editing your essay for clarity will improve your overall score.
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You have presented both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced view and is a good approach to discussing the topic.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Lavish
  • Societal norms
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic benefits
  • Luxurious
  • Ceremonies
  • Designer outfits
  • Unforgettable experience
  • Obligation
  • Social status
  • Memorable
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Grand
  • Expectations
  • Local economy
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