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The table and chart give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and chart give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows the number
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doctors
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 in Australia from 1986 to 2006. Meanwhile, the charts depict the ratio of
doctors
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 in two categories, by gender and place of birth in the same
period
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the number of
doctors
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 increased over the
years
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. Specifically,
this
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 figure in male by gender group and Australian
doctors
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 group dominate both of the graphs. Regarding the table, it can be observed that the percentage of
doctors
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 in the remaining country rose rapidly after 20
years
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,
about
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 23720 in 1986 to 35450
at the end
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 of the
period
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. In terms of the
doctors
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 in Australia by gender category,
this
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 figure in male
doctors
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 took the lead
through out
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of
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the
period
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 (more than 60 %),
although
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 the proportion decreased slightly in 2006, about 61.
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, female
doctors
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 witnessed a rising in proportion, which
only
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 about 25 at first but
finally
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 reached 40 in 2006. Coming to the place of birth field,
Australian
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Australia
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 led the chart,
about
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with about
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 62 in the first
period
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 and 59 in 1996. Foreigner doctor’s ratio climbed from 38% to 41% in the first two remaining
years
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.
Besides
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,
this
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 figure was
equally
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with
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to
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 the native
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doctors
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doctor's
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 group after 20
years
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, at 50.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words doctors, period, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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