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Some people fails in school, but ends up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is important things to succeed in life?

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one place or bath. So many
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university
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education
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requirement
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. So many
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interesting
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, like hobbies or
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specially
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computer
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business
), they don't
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their
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learning subject not care about it.
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also
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life
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every day
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experience
.
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, because the successful not stop in
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one field, it's
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comprehensive
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 many ways and places, and in my
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successful
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, they are smart and
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thinking
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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar; there are frequent errors that hinder clarity. For example, spelling errors like 'wourd' and 'discrebtion' detract from the overall professionalism of your essay.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph stays focused on a single main idea. Some ideas in your paragraphs tend to blend together, which can confuse the reader.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points, as this will strengthen your argument and give the reader a clearer understanding of your perspective.
insight
You recognize that success can take many forms beyond academic achievement, which is a valuable insight.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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