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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

Problem
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The problem
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 of logging
of
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the
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apply
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rain forests
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rainforests
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 has become
widly
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widely
wildly
 spread in countries with
tropical
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a tropical
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climate
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climates
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. It can cause changes
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in
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ecosystem
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ecosystems
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 and wildlife. I agree that deforestation leads to the extinction of animals and
displacement
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the displacement
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 of people from their usual places.
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, many species, including endangered ones, rely on rainforests for survival. Koalas are losing their homes and can not find food. No one can feed them or move them to another place. Many scientists are studying
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 issue, but they can not offer anything. At the same time, the loss of rainforests
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 negatively impacts indigenous human populations who depend on these ecosystems for their livelihoods. Changes in the environment can threaten their way of life. Every year many people die for that reason. Deforestation
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 logging reduces
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 of wild animals and people. I am sure
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 will lead to an ecological disaster. Helping to plant new forests and supporting charities can stop
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Consider providing a more detailed introduction that outlines your main points clearly and offers a stronger thesis statement. This will help set the stage for your argument.
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Expand on your points with more examples and explanations, particularly when discussing the impact on biodiversity and human populations. This will enhance the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Use clearer transitional phrases to connect your ideas between sentences and paragraphs. This will improve the overall flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include a conclusion that summarizes your arguments and reiterates your stance on the issue. This will strengthen the overall impact of your essay.
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You have identified the main problems associated with logging and its effects on both animal and human life, which shows a good understanding of the topic.
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Your essay presents a clear stance on the topic, showing your agreement with the idea that logging is harmful to ecosystems.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • carbon sink
  • global warming
  • indigenous tribes
  • livelihood
  • displacement
  • cultural erosion
  • soil erosion
  • water cycle
  • humidity levels
  • rainfall patterns
  • droughts
  • ecosystem services
  • pollination
  • climate change
  • logging
  • rain forests
  • habitats
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