You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: •what your suggestion is •why you think this suggestion will improve the park •when you would like to see this suggestion in action

Dear Councilor, I am writing to suggest a few changes to the
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located near 70 Temperance Street. I am a resident of 70 Temperance Street, M5H0B1, ON, Toronto, currently a student at Stanford University Canada. It has been more than 5 years since I have been residing at
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location. I wanted to reach out and share a few of my ideas to renovate Hyde
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, which is located near Temperance Street.
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, I would like to thank you for the
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maintenance of the
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. The
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has very good facilities for those who like to work out in the open.
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, It has no recreational activities for children when they visit the
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. I would request you to have a few activities built for children so that they could enjoy visiting the
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too.
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, kindly complete the construction before the upcoming summer. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Tiera Vaswani

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task achievement
Consider adding a brief explanation of why recreational activities are important for children. This can enhance your argument for the suggested improvements.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow between paragraphs. Adding a transition sentence between your thank you note and the suggestion might help create a smoother connection.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite and respectful tone, which is very suitable for this type of communication.
logical structure
The letter maintains a clear structure and is easy to follow, with clear paragraphs for each main point.
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