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Some people think that nuclear power plants are dangerous for the existence of human beings. Do you agree or disagree with the given statement?

A faction of the population holds the notion that nuclear power plants are hazardous
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 the survival of humankind. I agree
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 the given statement as there are ample reasons to substantiate it. When considering
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nuclear fission, it becomes apparent that nuclear plants which involve the combustion of several minerals can emit harmful by-products which
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 nuclear waste that remains radioactive and unsafe to human health.
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, the enormous amount of
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wastes
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 on a daily basis could be problematic to handle and
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dispose
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 it.
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, any mismanagement of the chemicals during the production can
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 to severe eruptions which could burst the entire plant.
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, the
chernobyl
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 incident not only ruined the environment
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 but
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 affected
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 babies.
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, nuclear facilities can act as a source of radiation
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 which can be an attractive space for terrorists to attack with less
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 and that will culminate in the need for extremely stringent security measures.
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,
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 the excessive use of reactants that are needed for the reactions to complete, the surroundings would become inhabitable.
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,
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 power can be produced by burning less fuel at
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maximum efficiency, the
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 that
human
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 needs to suffer from radioactive elements
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 a fact
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 should not be overlooked. In short, radioactive wastes are hard to
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, even though
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 would become terrorist spots and inhabitable
space
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. Ergo, I strongly believe that nuclear facilities are hazardous for humankind.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph logically follows the previous one to enhance the overall flow of the essay.
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Include more specific data or facts to support your claims, which can strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Consider rephrasing some sentences for clarity and grammatical accuracy to avoid minor errors that can distract the reader.
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The essay clearly states a position and provides reasons to support it, demonstrating a clear stance on the topic.
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The use of an example, such as the Chernobyl incident, effectively illustrates the potential dangers of nuclear power plants.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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