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The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words. Assel

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words. Assel
The layout illustrates the floor plan of a central library 20 years ago and how it looks today.
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, the public library was considerably modernized over the given time period. Nowadays,
it
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 has
a
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significant transformation with new technological devices in contemporary rooms in
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in
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 the past.
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 the map, on the right side of the
building
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building,
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 there were children’s books, which
replaced
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 by a lecture zone. The enquiry desk was redeveloped into café and adult non-fiction materials were converted into fiction ones for them. The information desk was equipped with new self-service machines. The tables and chairs in the centre of
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 were removed by
owners
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the owners
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.
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, the territory for CDs, videos and computer games was rebuilt for storytelling events with two comfortable sofas to watch them and children’s fiction manuscripts. The reading area, where visitors can acquire news from newspapers and magazines, was changed dramatically to an IT place with
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high-innovation facilities. Between those auditories, fantasy materials for
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mature individuals were reconstructed to all reference informational papers.

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