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The map below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel 2

The map below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Assel 2
The map shows the floor plan of a central library as it was 20 years ago compared to its current layout.
Overall
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, the public library was considerably modernized over the given time period. Nowadays, there has been
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a significant
 transformation with new technological devices in contemporary rooms in comparison to the past.
According to
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 the map, on the right side of the building, there were children’s books, which were replaced by a lecture zone. The enquiry desk was redeveloped into café and adult non-fiction materials were converted into fiction ones for them. The information desk was equipped with new self-service machines. The tables and chairs in the centre of the construction were removed by the owners.
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, the territory for CDs, videos and computer games was rebuilt for storytelling events with two comfortable sofas to watch them and children’s fiction manuscripts. The reading area, where visitors can acquire news from newspapers and magazines, was changed dramatically to an IT place with high-innovation facilities. Between those auditories, fantasy materials for mature individuals were reconstructed to all reference informational papers.

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