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The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided pie graphs outline data regarding the various
used
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types of
transporting
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transport
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 among 4 different means, which are cars and buses, bicycles and walking. in one
european
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 city namely Cambridge over a period of two years, which are the year of 2008 and 2018.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
most
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the most
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 reliable transportation for
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the british
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british
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British
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that is
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located in Cambridge
is
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was
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 buses in the year
of
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2008,
while
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 in 2018
was Bicycles
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bicycles were
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 the most common one. Looking at the diagram in more
details
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detail
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, all
the
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four categories had
a
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a noticeable different percentage
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noticeable
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noticeably
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 different percentages in both periods.
Furthermore
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, walking had the highest dramatical trend
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 11
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percent
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per cent
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 which
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was
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 the least in 2008,
then
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 reaching
the
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25
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percent
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per cent
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by
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with
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 a sharp
rose
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. Followed by bicycles which
was
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 higher than walking only by 6
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2008 and
increasing
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increased
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 to become the most used
transpotation
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transportation
 in 2018.
According to
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 the pie graphs,
in contrast
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 to the previous points, the use of buses in the two years
had
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did
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 not that
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a significant
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 trend. In detail, it was 30
percent
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 and had a
slightly
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 decrease by 5 figures.
Whereas
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, cars were the most favoured one in
the
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2008 but had a
sharply
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 drop in 2018
by
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reaching 20
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percent
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per cent
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 only and becoming the least favourite transportation mode.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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