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The diagram below shows the life cycle of a frog. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a frog. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram explains the natural life cycle of frogs in a lake without any human intervention.
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, it is readily apparent that
process
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the process
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 consists of 11 distinct stages, starting from the eggs,
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and continue
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continue
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continuing
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 till the
adultation
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adulation
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one
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apply
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.
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, the natural process commences by transforming
egg
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the egg
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 into embryos,
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this
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these
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 embryos later hatch
to
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into
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 Tadpoles clinging to
water-plant
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water
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. In the next stage, tadpoles breathe via gills and their tails continue to grow.
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this
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 way, they support their movement and development. As the cycle progresses, we can observe
hindlegs
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the hindlegs
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 on their body., which provide them with mobility. The first
coming
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apply
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stage of the improvement plays a crucial role, so they
storage
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 nutrients in the tail until their front legs emerge. Gradually, in the next steps, their tail almost disappears. Eventually,
tadpole
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the tadpole
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 transforms into a young frog, which will continue the cycle by reaching adulthood and reproducing.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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