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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?(EX)

In today's world, there
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 a wide range of access to different topics and a lot of
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 the
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People
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 can find
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 what they want to know easily and gain enough knowledge with the help of the
internet
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.
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, it is believed that
newpapers
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newspapers
 are becoming
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 old-fashioned thing and useless nowadays. I agree with
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 consider that easy access and a great deal of
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 can contribute
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 of newspapers. One of the main reasons is that
people
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 can search and find out many things which seem interesting to them. They can
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 delve into detailed
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analysis
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 without paying money
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 newspapers. Looking at the latest news is now more quickly
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 because there are many social media platforms and many
people
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 from all parts of the world can share plenty of
information
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 in their videos or blogs.
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, many apps are filled with reports as soon as some terrible events happen,
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 as the death of pope
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, the
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 contains more
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 in the
variou
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various
 saved files. The society can acquire more knowledge and improve their skills as a profession. To be more specific,
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 the
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, there
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 more specific
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 available for children, adults and elderly
people
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.
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, everyone can access everything as long as they are online.
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, there are many effective and good materials for
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students
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 can find comfortably. In conclusion, taking all the above-mentioned points into account, in my opinion, the
internet
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 has positive impacts on our life, making it
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easier and faster for

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task achievement
Make sure to address the prompt more explicitly by stating your position early in the introduction and reinforcing it in the conclusion. This will make your argument clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to enhance the flow of your ideas and demonstrate a wider range of language proficiency.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure accurate grammar and spelling, such as 'newspapers' instead of 'newpapers' and 'analyses' instead of 'analysises'. Paying attention to these small details will improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Provide clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance the logical flow of your essay. For instance, using linking words can help guide the reader more effectively.
task achievement
You presented a clear viewpoint in support of the idea that newspapers are losing relevance, which is a good foundation for your argument.
task achievement
You included relevant examples of how people can access information online, which strengthens your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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