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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart provides information regarding the
proportion
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 of inhabitants living in urban
areas
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in
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on
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 six specific continents in the world from 1950 to 2007, with its prediction by 2030.
It is clear that
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 the highest
proportion
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 of people preferred these
areas
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 is in North
America
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,
Latin
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America
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 and Europe. Notably, the percentage of urban population increases throughout the period in all six regions.
Overall
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, the most significant rise is in
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America
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, Asia and Africa. Focusing First on the continents with the highest
proportion
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 of urban population, in 1950, around 40, 50 and 60 per cent lived in towns and cities in
Latin
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America
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, Europe, and North
America
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. By 2007, the figure in
Latin
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America
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 almost doubled, which was nearly the same as the figures in the two other
areas
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. Notably, by 2030, between 80 and 90 per cent of the population is expected to reside in urban
areas
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. As for the remaining regions, at the beginning of the period, approximately 15% of inhabitants lived in cities or towns in Africa and Asia,
whereas
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 by 2007,
this
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 figure increased significantly by nearly 25%. By 2030, it is predicted to rise to over 50%. The total
proportion
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 of those living in urban
areas
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 in the world increases from 30% to 60% throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, areas, america, latin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Percentage (%)
  • Population
  • Continents
  • Developed vs Developing
  • Growth rate
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Technological factors
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Anomalies
  • Trend
  • Projection
  • Implication
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