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Band 4.5

With the wide use of computers and internet people can study and work from home with out going to school or company.do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

In a concurrent era, people are able to attend online classes and
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meeting
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.
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moreover
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i
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am agree
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given
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 statement
of
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that
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advantages
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the advantages
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are
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outweigh the
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.in
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essay
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 I am going to explain both the view of
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 of working from home with reason and examples.
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to begin
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technology
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the technology
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 era,
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availability
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the availability
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 of multiple gadgets,
individual
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individuals
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 can
work
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 easily. The primary advantage of working from house
,
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is time
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 and cost,
whereas
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 ,
the
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 one can save fare money which, he spends
for
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up and down to job purpose.
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 because of some personal issues. If one runs out to reach
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his destination. It might cost them extra. In
this
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 case, an individual
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 to be on
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,
for
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instance
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 to present
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on
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time
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, can
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afford
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taxi
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a taxi
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 which will cost extra money. To talk about
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time consuming
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,
in
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addition
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 getting prepared for
work
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,
to catch
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 up transport on
the
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time
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, stuck in
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a traffic
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jam
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, these all activities
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 extra
time
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. Where we are in
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a rush
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this
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 individual will wake up early. And stay ready to face all daily activities. Turning to the next point,
secondly
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,
time
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 flexibility,
where
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which
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 some office ,offers
with
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one's
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convenience
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work
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 schedule.
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example
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 the worker can plan smartly,
work
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time
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 equally personal life. So life can balance all things together. On
other
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 hand,
biggest
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the biggest
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disadvantages
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disadvantage
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,
lack
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is lack
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 of concentration,
while
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 working with family members, getting distracted is very easy. Anytime anyone
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the
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 door,
or
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any kind of noise cancellation be
create
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 not only by children,
even
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but even
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 by adults.
its
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 difficult to maintain
working
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a working
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 environment.
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 it has been noticed intermittent internet connection.
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 poor internet connection, delay in
work
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 despite
with
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frustration and stress. Which can
effect
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affect
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ones
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one's
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 mental health issues.
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 there are many
disadvantages
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 like poor internet connection and lots of disturbance yet
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advantages
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the advantages
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are
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outweigh the
disadvantages
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.as
i
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 mentioned in
beginning
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the beginning
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 ,
overall
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 I
m
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agree with
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advantages
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the advantages
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.

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task achievement
Ensure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. A thesis statement would give your reader a clearer understanding of your argument from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and paragraphs better, which will enhance the flow of your essay.
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Expand on your main points with more detailed explanations and examples for better clarity and support of your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Try to maintain consistent grammar and punctuation throughout your essay to improve readability.
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You provided relevant examples to illustrate your points, which is an important aspect of essay writing.
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Your understanding of the advantages and disadvantages of working from home shows good insight into the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • productivity
  • work-life balance
  • cost savings
  • overhead costs
  • digital resources
  • online courses
  • commuting
  • physical barriers
  • stress reduction
  • remote work
  • virtual environment
  • self-paced learning
  • accessibility
  • distraction-free
  • autonomy
  • collaboration tools
  • time management
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