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Some customers are increasely choosing to buy goods that are produces in their local area, rather than imported goods. What are the reason for this ? is this positive or negative trend

Nowadays, shoppers numbers who buy local products are growing than those who buy foreign ones.
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 change happens
due to
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 COVID-19 and it is a positive development. After the pandemic in 2020, people from everywhere started to trust their community production rather than transplanted goods.
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,
this
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 wasn't the only reason they
also
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 wanted to support low-income families which own small businesses in their hometown.
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, in the UK, online stores who shop locally are increased enormously than in the previous years.
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, the positive outcome of
this
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 change on the
economy
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 can't be unseen. Buying only the local made has helped to raise the
economy
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 and diversify it.
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, in Saudi Arabia,
locally
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 businesses
contribute
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in
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to
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 the
economy
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 after
the
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COVID-19 than
the
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petroleum in 2021. In conclusion, only locally made consumers has increased in recent years.
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 is because people
fear of
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 outside goods after corona virus which
led to affect
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 the
economy
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 in a positive way and
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 helped the small
stores
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store
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 owners.

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task achievement
Try to clearly define what the topic is asking in the introduction and ensure that each paragraph relates back to the main question. Clarifying your stance on whether the trend is positive or negative at the beginning will guide your content better.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using linking words (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', 'In addition') can help in presenting ideas in a more structured way, making the argument easier to follow.
task achievement
Make sure to develop your points further with more explanation or examples. This will enhance the depth of your argument and make your ideas more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy and phrasing. There are some minor errors that could be improved (e.g., 'shoppers numbers' could be 'the number of shoppers'). Clear and correct language enhances understanding.
task achievement
You presented a relevant viewpoint about local versus imported goods in the context of the COVID-19 pandemic, which is a timely and important topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow your argument overall.

Your opinion

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