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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart
illustrtes
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illustrates
 data
of
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on
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the propotion
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propotion
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proportion
 of the
population
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of
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living in 6 specific urban areas over eight decades from 1950 to 2030 . It is noticeable that there is
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upward
treand
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trend
 in all categories . the highest increase
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 to
te
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population
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 in
north
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America
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.
in
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 the other hand, the lowest
number of
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population
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for
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 Africa.
According to
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 the data, In 1950, Both North America and Asia had
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 higher number of citizens with 64 and 51.
In contrast
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 ,Africa had almost 15 which came to the
last
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 country
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 that
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. the only country
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that
 had approximately the same
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 over
57-year
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a 57-year
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 period from 1950 to 2007 is
Eruope
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Europe
. nearly 16
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figures
 escalated . From 2007 to 2030, there will be small increases compared to
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previous
pervious
 years . the
predication
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prediction
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 of the
population
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north
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 America will
become
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 more than 85.
whereas
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, Asia will remain below 60. the prediction for the number of individuals in Africa will be 54.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Percentage (%)
  • Population
  • Continents
  • Developed vs Developing
  • Growth rate
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Technological factors
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Anomalies
  • Trend
  • Projection
  • Implication
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