The picture below shows how a hot balloon works. Summariez the infomation by selecting and reporting the main features.

The picture demonstrates the general structure and floatation function of a hot
air
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balloon
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.
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, the function of a hot
balloon
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consists of 2 steps: rising into the
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and keeping itself afloat. The main part of a hot
balloon
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is an enormous
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with a body made of gores and panels.
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there is a parachute valve serving as a self-sealing flap at the top, the bottom part of the
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is covered with a skirt which connects the
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to a basket by several ropes.
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basket contains a burner and a propane cylinder. To make the
balloon
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fly, a mixture of propane from
propane
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a propane
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cylinder and the
air
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is heated with fire to produce
flame
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a flame
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in order to fill the hot
air
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into the
envelope
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. As the hot
air
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inside is lighter than the cool
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outside, the
balloon
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flies. In order to adjust and control the height of the flying
balloon
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, the parachute valve is sealed or unsealed to allow hot
air
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to escape at a controlled rate.

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Consider providing a brief summary of the main processes involved in the operation of a hot air balloon in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
You could improve your logical flow by explicitly linking the parts of the balloon to their functions throughout the description.
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Try to include more specific examples related to how the parachute valve functions to enhance clarity.
content
The description of the hot air balloon's structure is clear and informative, showcasing good knowledge of the subject.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized, with clear paragraphs that address different aspects of the hot air balloon's function.

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