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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village.
Chorleywood
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village
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 is near London. By the 19th century, the population increased steadily. The layout illustrates the
Chorleywood
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Village
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development
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 from 1868 to 1994.
Overall
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,
Chorleywood
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village
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 is connected by 3 different roads. Based on the data,
Chorleywood
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Village
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 had
Chorleywood
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 Park in the middle of the
village
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 and the station was on the south
side
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 of the park. The first
development
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 was built on the west
side
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 of
Chorleywood
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 Park,
due to
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 the main roads being the only access to
this
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village
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, from 1868 to 1883.
Thereafter
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, from 1883 to 1992 the
development
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 expanded to the south
side
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 of the
village
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 and built the station because the railway was built in 1909. In 1992 to 1970,
development
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 along the railway.
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, from 1970 to 1994 the east
side
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 of the
village
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 started to be developed,
due to
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 the motorway being constructed in 1970. The motorway passes through the railway on the east
side
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 and connects with the main road in the north.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chorleywood, village, development, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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