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Band 3

Many people nowadays donot feel safe either they are at home or go out. What are the reason? what can wo do to solve this problem.

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modern
 day era do not feel secure con be attributed to
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 of different factors the primary course would be
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a rise
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 in crime
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such
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 as robbers or assault. It makes
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insercure
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insecure
 and vulnerable. Another contributing factor to
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 could be the prevalence of content about criminals
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 social media platforms.
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more aware of crime and safety concerns.
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, some social media users may post fake news that
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 to the anxiety of the public.
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, some
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possible
 measures could be adopted to
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tackle
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 the problem described above. The first possible measure is for
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the
 government, to create stricter
regulation
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 and improve
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enforcement
.
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 could
disccorage
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discourage
people
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 from
comitting
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committing
 crimes.
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, they can install more surveillance cameras or increase police patrol, which can detect and deter criminals from taking action
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 of security. Another remedy might be that local authorities might hold social events to build stronger social ties In conclusion, there are two primary reasons why
people
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 day and age do not feel safe either they are at home or go out .
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, the government and local authorities could implement a
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 of measures to tackle the problem.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and structure of your ideas by creating distinct paragraphs for each point. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and details to support your claims. This will help to enhance the persuasiveness of your argument and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.
language accuracy
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, 'mordern' should be 'modern', 'con be' should be 'can be', and 'fossible' should be 'possible'.
task achievement
You have identified two relevant reasons for the lack of safety felt by people today, which demonstrates an understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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