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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university educatiom and the governments should make it free for all students no metter what financial background have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some
individual
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individuals
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 believe that all
pepole
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people
 have
right
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the right
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 to
inculde
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be
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on
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in
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university
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education
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moreover
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government
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the government
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 should make it free fee's access for all
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student
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students
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.In my opinion,
i
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I
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 would firmly agree with
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the statment
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statment
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statement
 because
i
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I
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 believe it could help
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student
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students
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 to
achive
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achieve
 goals and increase
level
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their level
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 of
education
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on
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in
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community
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the community
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. The primary
reson
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reason
 to
make
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take
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advantaces
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advantage
 for able
students
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 to access free
on
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apply
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university
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education
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 is that if government support
students
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 by
make
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making
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 the
edducation
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education
 free that will help
students
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 to
achive
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achieve
a goals
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goals
a goal
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 and improve
academic
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their academic
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 skills
for example
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found
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find
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 a good position in
career
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their career
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 lives that will lead to easy lifetime
in addition
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,
this
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 method will encourage
students
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 to complete
education
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 plans .From my own
expereience
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experience
recent
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in recent
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 years
i
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I
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 wish to complete
mt
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my
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bacholare
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bachelor
bachelors
study
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studies
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 but the amount of money that
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university
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the university
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request
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requests
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it
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apply
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make me
uncomfotable
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uncomfortable
 because
i
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I
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 do not have a huge amount of money so i
still
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am still
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on
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at
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 the same level of
education
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 and can not
found
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find
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 career that accept my higschool grades .
On the other hand
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,
make
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by making
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 it
easiler
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easier
 for
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student
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students
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 to
acces
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access
university
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free
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for free
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 make
community
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 increasing on
education
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case
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cases
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such
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 as
,
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apply
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high
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a high
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 level of
profesional
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professional
 teachers ,
doctores
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doctors
 and so on so if
education
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increase
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increases
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on
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in
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socity
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society
 that
make
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makes
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 us thankful
fot
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for
 the
advantges
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advantages
 and
benefites
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benefits
from
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of
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 their edducat .
For
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example
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 poor
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community
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communities
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 always suffer
form
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from
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 unemployment because of
less
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fewer
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opportunites
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opportunities
 and chances to complete
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education
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their education
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 and workes chances that could
helps
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help
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 people to
complet
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complete
 a high
education
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 .
On
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In
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 conclusion ,
overall
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,
i
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I
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 believe that
student
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 deserve to have
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the chansec
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chansec
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chances
chance
 and
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to complete their
education
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 because it
wiil
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will
 make their life more
effectivly
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effective
 and get high position career
on
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in
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future
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the future
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 .
Hence
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 government is the main major for helps and supports
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student
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students
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 to
edducate
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education
 and
achivement
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achieve
 goals so
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community
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the community
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 get
advantage
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an advantage
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 and
benefit
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benefits
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 from their
expereience
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experience
on
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in
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future
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the future
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Focus on organizing your ideas more clearly, ensuring each paragraph has a main idea that supports your thesis. Consider using clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph.
task achievement
Work on spelling and grammatical accuracy to improve clarity. This includes correcting errors like 'edducation' to 'education' and 'uncomfotable' to 'uncomfortable'.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your arguments. For instance, discussing how free education has benefitted specific countries or communities could make your points more impactful.
task achievement
Your passion for the topic is evident, and your personal experience adds a relatable touch to your argument.
coherence and cohesion
You clearly state your opinion in the introduction and provide a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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