Goverment investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Goverments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

Investments in arts

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services вызывает a lot of discussions. Some people believe that

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a waste of money, others believe that

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should invest in public services only. I disagree that investments in art are not

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investments create new working places and

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tourists from around the world

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph discusses a single main idea and follows logically from the previous one. Use linking words to connect your ideas more effectively.

task achievement

Expand on your points with more detailed explanations and relevant examples to support your arguments better.

task achievement

You express a clear opinion and stated your disagreement with the idea that investment in the arts is a waste of money.

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Your essay raises a relevant and significant topic, prompting interesting discussions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

55 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

investment
public services
cultural sectors
social cohesion
community well-being
artistic expression
cultural education
innovation
economic growth
critical thinking
emotional development
private funding
sponsorship

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