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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
The given line graph depicts the yearly figures for
people
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 joining in badminton,
basketball
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 ,tennis and rugby in a specific area over the period commencing in 1985 and culminating in 2005.
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, it can be observed that tennis witnessed an upward trend in participants,
whereas
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 a significant deep of rugby.
Furthermore
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, the number of
basketball
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 joiners
were
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 similar to the badminton as two figures remained stable during
this
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 time. Initiating with the sports that had noticeable changes in
people
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, the figures for tennis were recorded
ton
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to
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 increase slightly
form
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from
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 150 participants in 1985 to just over 200
people
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 in 2005.
Conversely
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, rugby, which was the highest number
of
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 the chart
as
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around 250
people
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 in 1985,
then
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 experienced a dramatic decrease in joiners to precisely 50 by 2005. Moving onto the remaining sports of the illustration, the record of
basketball
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 seemed stable
as
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 approximately 80 over the timeframe.
As well as
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this
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, the trend of badminton was similar to
basketball
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 which had no change
via
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 the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, basketball with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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